EQAO bulletin

In earlier posts, I've referred to the Education Quality and Accountability Office getting better at putting out information to demystify what it does. I received the latest example of this earlier today, the agency's online newsletter. There are some very agency things in this edition, such as messages from EQAO staff, etc.
However, there is also a "how would you score this" portion that I found fascinating.

It then provides the rubrick that would have been used by the markers to assess this open-response answer and assign it the relevant code. Each code also contains an example of an open response from the same section of the assessment that was scored at that level. For example, this fellow/gal likely wouldn't earn top marks (given the errors in conventions and some awkward sentences).
So, how would you score this?